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28 May 2003 @ 10:32 pm
I got quite excited by this weeks Fabble challenge so i went ahead and wrote two right away. I have a lot of time....
Anyhow the first one is cheating, its 320 words... i didn't want to change anything and i really liked it so i figured you all could just turn a blind eye to the word count.
The second one is dead on 250 though so, ah ha!


You sit across the room from me in an old tan chair faded from its spot in the sun by the window. A half burnt cigarette rests between your fingers, moving every few seconds to your mouth. It’s amazing how dazzling just that small motion can be. Your fingers move the cigarette down to flick into the ashtray beside you on the table. You move lazily from years of cigarette smoking that has turned these actions into a routine, a routine of yours that I can follow to the letter.

You’re staring out of the window now, deep in thought about something, but I can’t tell what. It’s always hard to read you but I still try. Your glasses are beside you on the table but of course you’re not wearing them. Though you can’t see well at all without them you’ve always chose to ignore that fact for glamour instead. Everyone calls me the cute one but you pay just as much attention to your appearance. I pay more attention to your appearance than my own.

You look away from the window to gaze over at me lazily laid out on the couch, my shoes on the floor and jacket thrown to the floor. You look as if you want to say something and I can tell its paining you. My brow furrows in confusion because again I don’t know what you want to say. You shake your head in defeat from yourself and stand to leave. I sit up and raise my hand in a motion to stop you.


You look back at me as I get up to stand next to you. In your eyes I see apprehension as I draw closer. But when I put my lips to yours your eyes slide closed and you wrap your arms around me with complete ease, as if this were just another thing I’d watched you do for years.

Next to Me

It’s early in the morning. The sun is just starting to come in through the thin hotel blinds. I’m awake but it doesn’t bother me. The first shafts of sunlight shine through the space between the curtains to land on your face. You look so sweet in sunlight.

I love to watch you sleep, knowing your mine. You’re my George and I’m your Paul, just how we like it. You sleep very peacefully with your head half on the pillow and half snuggled into my chest. I wouldn’t move you for anything. Your hair falls gracefully in your face, curling perfectly around your cheek and half over one eye. I brush it lightly away. Your hair is soft like pussy willows. I love to run my hands through it when ever I can, but especially when you sleep.

With you lying beside me nothing in the entire world could be better. I watch your chest rise and fall in a simple rhythm. I find myself breathing with you. I trace patterns in your chest and on your back, of anything. I trace the lines of your muscles and the creases in your skin. I feel like I can map you.

As the sun grows brighter I see it start to peel back your eyes. Slowly they open, squinting a little in the sun. You look up at me, cuddling closer.

“Morning.” I say nearly silently.

Then you kiss my cheek with a smile and I never want to move again.

(Anonymous) on May 28th, 2003 09:07 pm (UTC)
LOVE the J/P combination! "Wait" is awesome!!!
pallidsky on May 28th, 2003 09:13 pm (UTC)
::squeal:: Those were so lovely! I especially liked "Wait" but "Next to Me" was very good as well. Very well-written, I enjoyed them.
George H.: Beautiful John.georgeh on May 29th, 2003 03:47 am (UTC)
You have such an interesting style with both of these pieces. Second person narrative is really difficult for me to do, but you pull it off very well. I generally don't like J/P just on premise alone but without naming names you made it into a belivable little piece. I really enjoyed it; it was just so simple.

The second piece was very tender and I loved the way that you made Paul see both George and John from different perspectives. I have difficulty flipping from pairing to pairing but you did these quickly, and very nicely. It's so interesting to see the different perspectives Paul has of John and George. I really loved the comparison. It a beautiful back-to-back piece. Very striking. So glad this prompt fit you! I hope you write more. :)
Becca the Wonder Penguinsunnyrea on May 29th, 2003 01:50 pm (UTC)
Why thank you so much
ray of sunshineheartgirl on May 29th, 2003 06:50 am (UTC)
They're both very wonderful... They're very sweet!

Is the first one G/J or P/J? I thought it was G/J, but everybody else seems to think it's P/J...
Becca the Wonder Penguinsunnyrea on May 29th, 2003 01:55 pm (UTC)
P/J cause of the glasses
Abbeyrdabbeyrd62561 on May 29th, 2003 04:06 pm (UTC)
wait and next to me
Beautiful picture of John and Paul . I was delighted to see a J/P my personal fav. Years of knowing his habits and caring more about how he looks....so sweet and heavenly.
NEXT TO ME.....A fabulous inside view of waking up to these beautiful men. I loved the pussy willow like hair and tracing his chest.....oh so yummmy...Abbey
Becca the Wonder Penguinsunnyrea on May 29th, 2003 06:37 pm (UTC)
Re: wait and next to me
Thank you!
Dancing Piratesdancingpirates on May 29th, 2003 04:35 pm (UTC)
Very very lovely, both of them. My 2 favorite pairings, too! I like em very much
psychedelicmess on May 29th, 2003 08:29 pm (UTC)
I loved "Wait" and "Next to Me" was sweet as well. They are both loving and very mysterious almost. Keep up the good slash!

~~ Kristel
The Mogget: EwanSpottingthe_mogget on December 1st, 2006 06:58 pm (UTC)
Okay, I know this was posted, obviously, forever ago, but "Wait" was so good I had to let you know (I am finally getting through the annals of this comm). I can't tell you exactly why, but I really loved it. *memories*