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03 July 2003 @ 01:42 pm
 
Here is my piece of shit fabble for this week. =/

It can basically be any pairing you like. No names are mentioned in it. I picture it as Paul/George, from George's point of view.

Anyway, if anybody doesn't understand it, just comment and ask me what it means, and I'll be happy to explain. I tried reading it as if it wasn't my work, and seeing if I think readers would be able to understand it, and it seemed a little vague.

Oh well, they always said that you are your worst critic.


It was turning out to be a very awkward night. It was my first date with a guy… and I didn’t know how to act or what to say. It’d been him that asked me out, so I was expecting him to make the first move.

But he didn’t. He said there babbling on endlessly about random things. I didn’t have the nerve to say, “You talk too much,” even though I desperately wanted to. Something else that was really aggravating me was the way he wouldn’t make eye contact with me. I’d tried every way I knew to catch his eye, but it never worked. Why wasn’t he looking at me? I couldn’t stand it.

He hadn’t even kissed me yet.

I didn’t have the courage to kiss him first. What would happen if I did? Would he be angry? Or would he just kiss me back?

Things seemed to just be stuck. I didn’t know whether he’d ever been on a date with a guy before. All I knew was that I had not.

I didn’t really know what to say. I would say “Mhm” or “Oh” or “Right” when he would stop talking for a while, but I wasn’t really listening to him.

Finally he went silent. I looked over at him nervously, and finally, he looked at me. He reached over and took my hand gently in his, and pressed his lips against mine.

I could feel him smiling into the kiss.

It was about time.
 
 
Current Mood: nervousnervous
 
 
 
Van: Smile.van on July 3rd, 2003 12:09 pm (UTC)
Hey this was reall sweet and gentle. I liked it. Don't be so hard on yourself. :D
x_holley_x on July 3rd, 2003 01:01 pm (UTC)
Thanks. :) I guess I just like to give myself a hard time or something.

Oh, and I love your icons. Dhani is adorable.
Van: Sly.van on July 3rd, 2003 03:18 pm (UTC)
Heh, thanks. I adore Dhani.

Ahahahaa, I think all my writing is shit too so I know how you feel. Shall we start a club? "My writing is shit but I'm gonna post it anyway"?
x_holley_x on July 3rd, 2003 03:26 pm (UTC)
Yeah we should start a club. The PWTTWSBPIAC.

The People Think They Write Shit But Post It Anyway Club.

Hehehe I am corny. :x
Abbeyrd: the word is loveabbeyrd62561 on July 3rd, 2003 08:57 pm (UTC)
love the thought of the first date for both. How nervous and the sweet smile of a kiss that was finally made......very nice......
x_holley_x on July 4th, 2003 04:16 am (UTC)
Thank you. :)
THIS IS WARIO'S SPACE!vindaloo on July 3rd, 2003 09:34 pm (UTC)
can I be the prez of you club?
That was coy and subtle.
x_holley_x on July 4th, 2003 04:18 am (UTC)
Re: can I be the prez of you club?
Hee you can be the president of the PWTTWSBPIA if you want. ;P

And thank you. <3
Vanvan on July 4th, 2003 04:27 am (UTC)
Re: can I be the prez of you club?
LOL I want the job of the one who DELETES THE FLAMES.
x_holley_x on July 5th, 2003 05:43 am (UTC)
Re: can I be the prez of you club?
I'll be the one that reassures everybody that their fanfic isn't shit. ;P
Van: Pray For Mojovan on July 9th, 2003 04:50 am (UTC)
Re: can I be the prez of you club?
You'd really do that? That's a very nice job for you! Especially considering some of the REAL shit that is out there.

I mean, like, our stuff is good-but-we-think-it-sucks. But there is some real crap out there too you know? ahahaha I just can't comment on bad stories.
George H.: Beautiful John.georgeh on July 4th, 2003 04:29 am (UTC)
I loved it, I thought it worked very well. I liked thinking it was Paul/George.

you are your own worst critic because this was smashing. :)
x_holley_x on July 5th, 2003 05:42 am (UTC)
Thank you! :)
iwishiwastotchi on July 8th, 2003 07:28 pm (UTC)
☺☻♥♦♣♠
Only i'm allowed to call my Beatles slash stories peices of shit. *shakes fists* Hurr...

Yours was cute and adorable and... yay. I think yay should be a feeling, rather than a... what the hell are those things? Like... interjections or something?

Yeah, my stories are so shitty, they... well, they are teh crappy, let's leave it at that.

Roughly 9 out of 10 dentists agree I try too hard to be funny, but end up making an ass of myself.
You People And Your Quaint Little Categoriesjoanne_c on July 9th, 2003 10:27 pm (UTC)
This was so cute and sweet. I know what you mean about thinking your own writing is bad, because I think most writers do. I know I'm one of them.